Some of us are reading the novel “The Iron Man” by Ted Hughes in reading group time. Today we innovated on a paragraph in the text. We had to describe a different sort of robot than the Iron Man in the novel.
Here is what we wrote:
“Then, as Hogarth watched, a mean bossy figure climbed up over the cliff-top. The two lights shone into the sky. They were the hated figure’s eyes. A feared, dangerous figure, higher than a house, enormous and scary in the twilight, with bulging headlamp eyes.
The devious Iron Man is back!”
“Then, as Hogarth watched, a happy, colourful figure skipped up over the cliff-top. The two lights shone into the sky. They were the happy, colourful figure’s eyes. A small rainbow figure, smaller than a dog, colourful and shrinking in the twilight, with colourful headlamp eyes.
The happy, colourful Tiny Man was back!”
“Then, as Hogarth watched, a dirty, fat figure slowly walked up over the cliff-top. The two lights shone into the sky. They were the fat figures eyes. The fat smelly figurewas smaller than a house, pink and shrinking in the twilight with tiny headlamp eyes.
The fatty was back!”
“Then, as Hogarth watched, a happy helpful figure scuttled up over the cliff-top. The two lights shone into the sky. They were the courageous figure’s eyes. A giant colourful figure, smaller than a house, shiny and small in the twilight with awkward headlamp eyes.
The colourful Iron Man is back!”
“Then, as Hogarth watched, a menacing, devious figure flew up over the cliff-top. The two lights glowed into the sky. They were the devil’s eyes. A massively huge figure, 13 times taller than an office block, a dirty red colour and getting bigger as he got closer, with red headlamp eyes.
The feared figure was back!”
“Then, as Hogarth watched, a harmless, bright figure danced up over the cliff-top. The two lights glowing in the sky. They were the harmless figure’s eyes. A bright figure, smaller than a house, shining and glowing in the twilight, with colourful headlamp eyes.
The Robot man was back!”
We tried to make our writing put pictures in your head – did we succeed? Let us know what you think.
Image: ‘Iron Man movie‘
3 Baz have just started a writing program called VCOP:
V = vocabulary
C = connectives
O = openers
P = punctuation.
Everyday we learn and practise a different skill in one of the VCOP areas. We have been using highlighters to highlight exciting examples of vocabulary, punctuation, openers and connectives in lots of different texts.
This helps us to see what professional writers do and the types of words they use to engage us in reading and to put pictures in our heads.
We have new writing folders which contain our writing goals and examples of our writing. We work out our goals from the writing we do. We are trying to get to our next level – which is a challenge to us to keep improving our writing. Each of us has individual goals that we are working on.
We all have a writing partner; we work together and encourage each other. We share ideas, read our work and give each other tips to improve. It really helps having a partner give you feedback because “two heads are better than one” and you get more ideas and suggestions on how to make your writing tighter.
So far we are enjoying thinking about our writing, talking about what we know and trying to stretch our brains to become the best writers we can be!
We can’t wait to find out what we will be doing next week in our VCOP lessons ……….
Irina Lizzie Mahrukh